Knight Lights Ch1
on July 14, 2025
at 2:59 pm
How you guys liking the comic so far? I’ve enjoyed drawing it, got 14 more pages done already for it and just like 2 or maybe 3 more till the arc is finished
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Welcome back Olwen, Always like the tattoos
I like the updated look. The original ended too quickly to get a real feel for it so I’m interested in where this goes.
well at 15 pages I’ve already managed to outlast the original 😀
I got a lot of stories jotted down to tell so hopefully I can keep motivated to draw it and people can be motivated to read it
Why does she look like she’s about to spit in her sister’s mouth in that last panel?
Sisters being sisters I guess. Was going more for her making a face at her and the sister messing with her cheek squeezing her face all lovey dovey.
It doesn’t scan well at all there’s a bunch of wasted space in the third panel where you have a bunch of word bubbles. You could have worked on the layout more and had your intention come across better.
Got to establish the room a bit from time to time, and establish that the guys went outside.
Sounds like a plan and could work in the future for anal virginity too.
Seems like you skipped a bunch of pages of story here like they were talking and then all of the sudden dogman dick jump scare like I get the temptation to skip straight to the good part but this is jarring
Jump scare is apt, that was the intended goal, to make it feel very abrupt and put you into Olwen’s shoes where she still is processing things and sorta being taken by the waves out to sea before she really even decided to get into the water.
Important bits are there, how the boys feel about it will be hopefully carried by their reactions watching but they are more of an afterthought here and won’t get a lot of development till later chapters when the story will set out to quantify their relationships.
Scene is looking really good so far
I really like the comic so far. Especially the coloring